Real Script:
At the park during the evening
Group of friends-
Josh why are you standing there come in you idiot
Josh – I can’t
Cuts to flashback of lifeless body (screaming) then a cut
back to a medium close up of Josh’s face
Group of friends – like what
Josh – Bad things have happened in my child hood
Group of friends – What happened (they all heckle and made
jokes)
Flashback of park at twilight with distant ambient sound of
families walking way.
Lucy– Josh, it’s time to go home now
Josh- No, I don’t want to go home yet. Let me go and play
on the swings
Lucy– all of the other families are leaving
Josh – only because it’s getting dark
Lucy– that’s not the only reason
Josh – what do you mean?
Lucy– have you ever heard of the child collector?
Josh – who?
Lucy – There is a legend about a man called the child
collector who haunts this park seeking and kidnapping children like you who
don’t leave the park by nightfall
(fade out dialogue)
Child collector – little did they know I was watching them
(Fade in)
Josh runs off to play on swings
Lucy – (frustrated) Fine, let the child collector catch you
(Lucy gets up to leave)
(Cut to Josh going up to a man on the swing)
Josh – can I have a go on the swing?
(Man starts to turn, then a cut to close up of josh’s face
he then screams and cuts back to his sister Lucy walking away)
(Lucy hears a scream and runs over to where he heard the
scream to see a man on the swing facing towards him with his head down but no
josh in sight)
Lucy - where’s my brother?
(Slow zoom which speeds up rapidly to the child collector
looking up towards him)
(Lucy turns to run away but child collector is faster than
him so he grabs him by the neck)
Child collector – I told you so
(Makes his way over to the slide, laughter going down the
slide)
Child Collector - it’s time for round two josh (laughter)
This is the script me and my group created once we had settled
on the plot of our horror opening. Creating a script would be beneficial to us
as it gave us an outline of what we wanted the characters to say and how it
would flow.
Old Script:
At the park during the evening
Adult Josh – (to wife) c’mon, let’s get the kids and go home
(anxiously)
Sally – don’t be silly Josh, the kids are having fun don’t
ruin it for them. What’s wrong with
you? Why are you always anxious here?
Cut to flashback of lifeless body (screaming) then a cut
back to a medium close up of Josh’s face
Adult Josh – you know I don’t like to talk about my
childhood
Flashback of park at twilight with distant ambient sound of
families walking way.
Tom (older brother) – Josh, it’s time to go home now
Josh - No, I don’t want to go home yet. Let me go and play
on the swings
Tom – all of the other families are leaving
Josh – only because it’s getting dark
Tom – that’s not the only reason
Josh – what do you mean?
Tom – have you ever heard of the child collector?
Josh – who?
Tom – There is a legend about a man called the child
collector who haunts this park seeking and kidnapping children like you who
don’t leave the park by nightfall (fade out dialogue)
Child collector – little did they know I was watching them
(Fade in)
Tom – that’s why we should go
Josh – no, I don’t believe you (runs off to play on swings)
Tom – (frustrated) Fine, let the child collector catch you
(Ambient sound of mobile phone)
(Exaggerated loud breathing)
(Extreme close up of phone saying ‘I will’)
(Cut to Josh going up to a man on the swing)
Josh – can I have a go on the swing?
(Man starts to turn before a cut back to Tom)
(Tom hears a scream and runs over to where he heard the
scream to see a man on the swing facing towards him with his head down but no
josh in sight)
(Slow zoom which speeds up rapidly to the child catcher
looking up towards him)
(Tom turns to run away but child collector grabs him by the
neck)
Child catcher – I told you so
This script is the old version we created that involves a similar plot. However, it has a brother siblings instead of a sister sibling. We had to change our script as we couldn’t find the right actors to cast as the bother and old older version of josh during the present day scenes.